* His clear amber eyes soberly sought out and met her blue ones. [Their eyes didn't move out of their bodies.]
* His eyes traveled down to his shoes.
* His eyes returned to the altar while his ears listened to the words.
Readers will understand your meaning, but if you take the words literally, the sentences are ludicrous.
Rather than taking the eyes from the body,
use words that describe the eyes' action
such as stare, gaze, watch, look, or gawk.
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